you managed that so well in a very short story. the childlike innocence just a veneer over a deep horror.
top marks!
ive struggled with a few stories that i cant finish that have this theme of a darkness being woken to come back...and...do something... but i cannot seem to get to the resolution...
This story is completely unique. The subject, the narrative... for some reason, I imagine the tale being whispered in breathless sentences. This was phenomenal read and the ending was absolute perfection.
Great atmosphere! I could feel the breeze, hear the grass, and see the insects. And I love that you left some of "what happened" to the reader's imagination. Great job!
When Mari was beating on the ground calling for them to give her mom back - wow, powerful stuff. You have a way with writing from the perspective of children that makes your scary stories all the scarier as they're coming from someone small and vulnerable. Loved the ending too. Well done.
Awesome work!
you managed that so well in a very short story. the childlike innocence just a veneer over a deep horror.
top marks!
ive struggled with a few stories that i cant finish that have this theme of a darkness being woken to come back...and...do something... but i cannot seem to get to the resolution...
you did it so well in this story. 😎
Thank you! You’ll get the resolution down in due time.
This story is completely unique. The subject, the narrative... for some reason, I imagine the tale being whispered in breathless sentences. This was phenomenal read and the ending was absolute perfection.
Thank you so much for the kind words!
Mom was a very unlucky woman.
Fun & creepy in the very best way.
She was unfortunately. And thank you!
Very nice
Thank you!
This curdled my blood.
Happy to curdle!
Great atmosphere! I could feel the breeze, hear the grass, and see the insects. And I love that you left some of "what happened" to the reader's imagination. Great job!
Thanks!
Aw, that was brilliant! Great job!
Thank you so much!
When Mari was beating on the ground calling for them to give her mom back - wow, powerful stuff. You have a way with writing from the perspective of children that makes your scary stories all the scarier as they're coming from someone small and vulnerable. Loved the ending too. Well done.
Thank you! I do have the mind of a child so it was easy :/
I have always been fascinated by these Japanese statues, and now, I understand why... Terrific atmosphere and ending.
Thank you! Got to watch out for those little guys.